Your raw GED Score is determined by giving you 1 point for each correct answer and 0 points for each incorrect answer.Your raw score is then “equated” to derive a scaled score. CK-12 Foundation - Sat Prep - https://behssatprep.wikispaces.com/PWN the SAT - Not affiliated with or endorsed by the American Council on Education (“ACE”) or GED Testing Service LLC.I think that the details is really what needs work in this essay…
One thing that’s good is that you use an example from your life. But it needs to be better connected to your main idea.
Could burning your hand have become bad adult behavior? to pay attention to children to stop them from developing bad behavior that will follow them into adulthood.
Did adults’ good advice stop you from developing behavior that would hurt you as an adult? I think the idea for the conclusion is good, but that it could be more clearly stated.
The details that you give in the essay are specific bad things children might do, and the story from your own life about burning your hand.
it’s better to restate the question in your own way than to just repeat the GED question. In the introduction, you make your main point, that bad adult behavior comes from bad childhood behavior. You list a number of bad child behaviors, but then you don’t really follow through with them in the rest of the essay (and at least one of them doesn’t really become a bad adult behavior, so it doesn’t apply very well to the essay… It might be better to have just one or two bad childhood behaviors and explain how they start and how they become bad adult behaviors.
The middle paragraphs talk about how children learn bad (and good) behaviors from adults, but it doesn’t really relate it back to the main idea…how those behaviors then become bad adult behavior when the child grows up.I’d like to see the middle paragraph talk about a couple of specific examples of bad behavior children might have, where they come from, and how they become bad adult behaviors.The GED credential is issued by the state (territory or province) that the student resides in.The GED credential is typically considered to be equivalent to a high school diploma.You can talk about how that behavior starts, grows, and becomes bad adult behavior…a child sees a parent drinking, wants to try alcohol, and then when they’re an adult they become an alcoholic. I'm sharing my evaluation because it's so helpful to see a sample of what to look for.Whenever I look at an essay, I look at the same things the GED (and TASC and Hi SET! I think you did a pretty good job staying focused on the question of why people continue to do things, even though they know they’re harmful or bad.At least one of the examples you give of bad behavior for children don’t really apply to adults… I think that if you really make the connection between the bad childhood behavior and bad adult education, it would be a stronger essay.For example, you mention that a child might want to taste alcohol.